Your writing is always so lush, and this is no exception. They're both so alternately relaxed and nervous; it really rings true to me. I adore how familiar they are with each other, but how that is the very thing that they're terrified of losing.
"Can I be your first?"
"Yes," I answer instantly.
There's something wonderfully simple about this exchange. You really get the sense that they're both kind of awestruck by how important a moment it is for them both.
"How," he breathes some time later, his hips increasing in speed slightly, our foreheads resting together, "how is this so good?" We kiss messily, Dom's hands cupping my face as I pull back to look him in the eye.
I think it's fabulous how even though they've both thought about shagging each other before, it's so much better than either of them anticipated. You captured their mutual surprise really well.
"Just fucked," he grunts, "recovering. Dominic need rest," he continues in a caveman voice, "Matthew give Dominic good fucking."
I can't even describe how much that made me laugh. There were tears in my eyes, honestly. Brilliant ending.
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Date: 2012-09-29 12:52 am (UTC)"Can I be your first?"
"Yes," I answer instantly.
There's something wonderfully simple about this exchange. You really get the sense that they're both kind of awestruck by how important a moment it is for them both.
"How," he breathes some time later, his hips increasing in speed slightly, our foreheads resting together, "how is this so good?" We kiss messily, Dom's hands cupping my face as I pull back to look him in the eye.
I think it's fabulous how even though they've both thought about shagging each other before, it's so much better than either of them anticipated. You captured their mutual surprise really well.
"Just fucked," he grunts, "recovering. Dominic need rest," he continues in a caveman voice, "Matthew give Dominic good fucking."
I can't even describe how much that made me laugh. There were tears in my eyes, honestly. Brilliant ending.
Great job, sweetness!